The thing was,
you couldn’t watch all of them
(not all at once.)
He began to make a whining noise–
unaware in his locked concentration
that he was making any sound
(at all.)
His eyes darted,
from one hedge creature to the next
Trying to see them
(move.)
The wind gusted
making a hungry rattling sound
in the close matted branches.
What kind of sound would there be
(if they got him?)
But of course he knew.
A snapping, rending, breaking sound.
(It would be–)
no no NO NO
I WILL NOT BELIEVE THIS
NOT AT ALL!
He clapped his hands to his over his eyes
clutching at his hair, his forehead
(his throbbing temple.)
And he stood like that
for
a
long
time
(dread building.)
Until he could stand it no longer
and he pulled his hands away.
******
The idea behind a found poem is to take a paragraph from a book, and break it down into lines that form a poem. I borrowed this one from Stephen King’s The Shining.
It’s one of my favorite scenes, and although it didn’t make into the movie version, I can’t fault Stanley Kubrick for that. I don’t know how you would render this in a film without it completely devolving into comedy.
I like this kind of writing 🤓 I probably should try it…looks cool 👍👍😀
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Definitely, it’s fun playing with the words and breaking them up.
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I really enjoyed this as I read the Shining years ago. The way you broke it down builds until … now I need to read the book again as I have to find what happens next! Great read thanks.
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Thank you!
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I like this! I want to try it myself
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Definitely, they are fun to write!
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an intriguing form, thanks for explaining it
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And thank you for reading!
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What a creative idea on how to shape a poem, and I love the feeling behind it! I am inspired to give this a go since I have so many favorite books. 🙂
I also nominated you for the Vincent Ehindero Blogger Award. Details at https://ninchronicles.wordpress.com/2020/07/03/vincent-ehindero-blogger-award/
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Thank you! They are fun to write.
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A neat idea of a found poem, and I’d like to try this sometime. And I enjoyed your poem — you certainly captured the character’s anxiety of the hedge animals!
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