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A Night on Bald Mountain

The sun is setting and night is near

A devil is coming under cloak of night

Cling to anything you hold dear

Through your shutters vampires will leer

looking for pale necks to bite

The sun is setting and night is near

Listen closely, can you hear

incantations the witches recite?

Cling to anything you hold dear

On the mountaintop a strange shape will appear

His horns and claws a fearsome sight

The sun is setting and night is near

When you smell the stench of forty thousand years

A rank perfume curdled with the scent of fright

Cling to anything you hold dear

Listen closely, can you hear?

Chernobog arrives under cloak of night

The sun has set and night is here

Cling to anything you hold dear

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Day 15 of NaPoWriMo challenged us to write a poem based on our favorite type of music. I instantly thought of A Night on Bald Mountain. Fantasia was my favorite movies of growing up, especially the dramatic ending pairing A Night on Bald Mountain with Ava Maria. It’s the reason I walked down the isle to Ava Maria instead of the standard Bridal Chorus.

About halfway through this poem I noticed a bit of a similarity with Vincent Price’s monologue at the end of Michael Jackson’s Thriller, so I had to sneak in a little bit of a tribute to that as well.

I’m posting this to Dverse’s open link night, be sure to stop by and see how NaPoWriMo is inspiring other poets ;).

19 Comments

  1. The repetition is so effective here….from “the sun is setting and the night is near”….which is innocuous and could be seen as quite pleasant….until you read on. And then the warning: Cling to anything you hold dear! Oh my!

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  2. Glenn A. Buttkus says

    You had me at “when you smell the stench of forty thousand years”. I don’t recall the name of this form, but the refrains work well. A nice blend of FANTASIA, Ann Rice, and Vincent Price.

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  3. sanaarizvi says

    The use of repetition is incredibly powerful here and builds up to drive the message through. 💝💝

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