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The Topiary Garden

The thing was,

you couldn’t watch all of them

(not all at once.)

He began to make a whining noise–

unaware in his locked concentration

that he was making any sound

(at all.)

His eyes darted,

from one hedge creature to the next

Trying to see them

(move.)

The wind gusted

making a hungry rattling sound

in the close matted branches.

What kind of sound would there be

(if they got him?)

But of course he knew.

A snapping, rending, breaking sound.

(It would be–)

no no NO NO

I WILL NOT BELIEVE THIS

NOT AT ALL!

He clapped his hands to his over his eyes

clutching at his hair, his forehead

(his throbbing temple.)

And he stood like that

for

a

long

time

(dread building.)

Until he could stand it no longer

and he pulled his hands away.

******

The idea behind a found poem is to take a paragraph from a book, and break it down into lines that form a poem. I borrowed this one from Stephen King’s The Shining.

It’s one of my favorite scenes, and although it didn’t make into the movie version, I can’t fault Stanley Kubrick for that. I don’t know how you would render this in a film without it completely devolving into comedy.

9 Comments

  1. I really enjoyed this as I read the Shining years ago. The way you broke it down builds until … now I need to read the book again as I have to find what happens next! Great read thanks.

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